Chameleon poem I wrote.

[chameleon884]

ok so today i was assigned in my language/ english class that we have to write a riddle. I thought right off the bat, "Im gonna do a chameleon!"

i know this is the worst peice of liturature ever written but its my best. plz dont make fun of me. Tell me how i could make it better!

I am cold during the dark of night, cozy warm during the day.
A part of me is fast as lighting, but the rest is very sllloooowwww.
I am usually rather little, but i inflate like a balloon and am large.
I am very content to myself, in the blink of an eye I am Fierce, mad angry.....
I can barely hear or smell.
I have four limbs yet I have five.
When I stalk my prey in the trees, I am quiet, stealthy, unseen.


please tell me your thoughts

 

[Seeco]

Cool! The key is the tongue! You could add something about the eyes moving separately.

 

[ShaunaLynnA]

I think it is a cute poem If you wanted to you could add something about the eyes and tongue to make it a little longer! Nice job at the writing better then I could have done.

 

[Gensen]

Wonderful job you did!

Great job you did there.... but as the others said if you could incorporate something of the tongue and eyes would be an asset to you!

Or leave it as is, that's what's great it's your to make your own!

 

[Silkyslim]

I think you did really well man. Don't sell yourself short! Maybe a "Nothing escapes my vision even if my head does not move." Sort of line but I think you got it all figured out already.

 

[carol5208]

How about "You see four limbs, yet I have five" instead of using I have, I have twice. and "I scarcely hear or smell, but I am a swift hunter" then lead in with the last line about stalking the prey. Just a couple of suggestions! You have done a nice job so far!!!

 

[Silkyslim]

How about "You see four limbs, yet I have five" instead of using I have, I have twice. and "I scarcely hear or smell, but I am a RELENTLESS hunter" Just a couple of suggestions! You have done a nice job so far!!!

Fixed ^

 

[carol5208]

Fixed ^

ah! Even better!! Two heads are better than one!!!

 

[chameleon884]

cool responses. thanks.

cool ideas carol and silkyslim!